This story is the hardest time of this characters life. These events have nothing to do with me or anyone else i know.
Friday night I John went to bed exhasted. When I woke up Saturday morning everything in my room was in suitcases except my bed and my drawer. Action figures, clothes, posters in suitcases. I looked out the window and saw a U-Haul truck. Our house had been foreclosed. My mom came in and said "John we got foreclosed, I have clothes for you on the table, you have 30 min to get ready till then all the furniture will be moved out."
I said to her "Where are we moving to?"
She replied we are moving to your Aunt Pam's house. I had never been to her house because she lived a 4 hr car ride from our old house.
This is my first day at my aunts house. Her house is very nice, great neighborhood, I plan on playing basketball outside. As I walked to the park I noticed that this is a very rich neighborhood. When I got to the park there were many kids there playing basketball. As i walk onto the court everyone looks at me, they can tell I'm new. Then I hear someone call my name, I turn around and I see the impossible. The person who called my name was named Carlos, he was my best friend and he told me that he had moved here after his home got foreclosed, but I didn't know that. I did not play basketball that day. In fact I took Carlos to my new house and when my mom opened the door she didn't say anything she just hugged my and Carlos.
I am a bit confused about this story also. Your conclusion is hard to get.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Ayan. This one's pretty confusing. It doesn't quite feel like a story but rather the lead up to a story. Since you don't take us inside J's head, it's hard to understand how, exactly, the day felt for him. Why was it the hardest day in his life? you don't really go into that.
ReplyDeleteIf you expand this, see if you can deal more directly with this.